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    Default Help with english..

    Because this is the only english forum i suscribed to, i'm going to ask some help here.. I'm writing a cover letter in english for a french company in China.. and am not sure about my english.. Would some native english speaker tired of programming mind helping me a bit with my sentences.. :) ?

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    I am in my final year of a Masters’ degree program with an IT specialisation at the graduate school of engineering HEI in France. Available from june 2010, I would like to apply to IREC China for an internship or a VIE position to complete my studies, and possibly leading to a Network or a Software Engineer position.
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    I already have a good knowledge of Chinese culture as I spent six months of the last three years in China, and am very able to take care my own of the logistic details such as accomodation or local authorities registration.
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    Theses are the sentences i'm worried about.. so i would like some other people's opinions..

    I know it's a little off subject on a Java forum but i don't know where else to post..

    Thanks a lot,

    Eric

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    1. ) Make it "master's degree"

    2.) Change "Available from june 2010, I would like to apply to IREC China for an internship or a VIE position to complete my studies, and possibly leading to a Network or a Software Engineer position."
    To :"I would like to apply to IREC China for an internship or VIE position hopefully leading to a Network or a Software Engineer position after completing my studies".

    3.) Change

    "as I spent six months of the last three years in China, and am very able to take care my own of the logistic details such as accomodation or local authorities registration."
    to

    "as I spent six months of the last three years in China and am able to take care of logistic details such as accomodation and local authorities registration."


    That will improve it somewhat.

    P.S What happens if you get the position and they expect you to know lots of English?

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    Thanks a lot for quick reply r035198x..

    Well my english is not that bad.. is it? Actualy my spoken english is quite good, but when i have to deal with formal english, this is different..

    Again, thanks a lot for your suggestions, that will help a lot.

    Eric

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    I skipped the part about being available from June 2010. You'll have to add it somewhere.

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